[UnbornBuddha]

Interesting topic, by the way. Let's see how you guys approached it.

Ullr: I feel you over-saturated your verse this time, also your language wasn't as captivating as it usually is. It felt rushed and not as calculated, but the strength of you as a writer still comes through. I said to you many times before, I feel you are a great writer, but sometimes the way you attack topics does not suit you and could be modified to really be at the level of your writing. I still liked it though, a bit overbearing with the internal dialogue and such, without really exposing anything that speaks on a greater scale.

Razah: On one hand, your writing is very poignant, but on another hand quite simple. Which, I gather is your preferred style, albeit I do like complexity so sometimes your verses don't allure me too much because there is nothing to really learn for me and I'm an eternal student. But, nothing against you as a writer, this are my preferences.; you always have a knack for writing in such way that there is no misstep in what you're conveying. Plus, you didn't overbear your writing as Ullr and the read was smooth. Albeit, many of your verses look alike, so I would suggest adding more creative ways of making each of your verses appear as more distinguished and less homogenous.

Vote: Razah- his writing here was more captivating.