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Old 08-20-2015, 02:41 AM   #7
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Fuuuccckkkkk you both this week gotdammit
Both battles I've read so far have contrasted so much you assholes make it hard to decide.
Razah had the overall better verse, a much smoother/more polished rhyme scheme and flow along with better wording choices BUT it didn't really go with the picture topic very well imo. Maybe I'm just too tired or overlooking something but I fail to see how carving a destiny or war or anything in the verse represent a girl or a wall of notes at all.
Ullr your verse was much more clear as to being on the topic but the flow had its highs and lows seemingly back to back lines. One line would sound perfect and the next was scattered all over lol I loved the imagery in both verses tho honestly so again you bitch waffles make it hard on me.
As much as I want to say ullr should get my vote because he stayed on topic mucb better than razah in a TOPICAL battle, razahs verse was just too polished and well presented for me to do so. If the flow would have been a tad bit cleaner I would have forgiven it and gave U my vote but as it stands I have to vote for razah for the better overall verse.
Keep it up guys
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