Tbh this was hard for me to vote one.
On one hand it's a no show verse for the most part which kept the technique an form even if short and kinda off topic, and on the other hand a verse that was either rushed or trying way too hard to be different that it kinda collapsed in itself.
Dancake I feel this was an awesome poem, but this is a topical league and the hesitating flow really took away from this because even after reading it three times it still made me stop alot to see where the rhymes caught up with each other. Again poetry but not suited as well for this battle.
But even with that aside you stayed on topic decent enough and atleast tried to tell a story verses a no show verse with sound technicals.
Fortunately because of the topic use I have to vote for Dan but any more effort at all to stay on topic probably would have resulted in a reversal of my vote.
Vote dancake
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