This was very beautiful. In fact, I feel like you are one the writers I feel that writes the most beautifully. I think that is a good word for your writing. Because as you know beautiful implies certain connotations, it is powerful in a sense, but not because it evokes internal strength, but rather because it is alluring, there's mystique imbued in its captivation. The way you use words is aimed toward enticement of cutaneous sensory regions. but I feel what you can add to make your writing more driven is to add a visceral grip on the reader. Something that possesses the reader not because of the eloquent remarks, but rather because there's a deeper sense of correspondence.
Let me explain what I mean by the last statement. Because I notice you do write always with like an extended metaphor. There is something for the reader to grasp on the surface, but underlying this theme there is something more meaningful. But, this meaning is shrouded by your language. It is hard to penetrate, connect, or gain further insight because it almost seems you intentionally don't want the reader to know the whereabouts to what you've hidden. And while, enticement might work well in your sexual exploits, in the realm of writing, I feel it leaves the reader with a yearning for something more, even if you intrinsically provided it, but hid it under a silver tongue pretext to not reveal a greater link to the magniloquence and vastness of your thoughts.
Thanks for the read.
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