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Old 08-12-2015, 07:28 PM   #5
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starting line was really strong.
rhyme scheme sometimes was a lil weird. I think there was one line were you didn't rhyme. Flows like this really show how they would truly be in an audio. written it's kind of hard to follow kind of.

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