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Old 08-12-2015, 11:43 AM   #6
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And thus, "England Prevails" the same as a ship with the wind in its sails
propeled by a lie, assuaging the course
thus they fell into binds with the raging divorce
of hatred and force, no refrain or remorse
only swing stories and fabrication maintaining with force.
An image of prosperity, reanimating a corpse.


I enjoyed this section but hated how you used force twice
that's my only gripe with pieces a majority of the time
it seems like you really did your homework which is great
I love the movie, fan of the comics & there's a lot of angles to attack this at
you really molded into a well thought idea and made the piece shine I feel
I really don't know what else to say, I thought this was dope...

Revolutionary souls lost between the translation
From paper to actual realization
Tamed rebels conquering acres of cages
House broken outcast's outlawed from the pages

^^^
I thought this was cool, but towards the end I was really let down
from what I've seen from you lately you tend to say a lot by saying so little
this time around maybe the inspiration was lacking, or maybe you rushed to finish this verse?
I enjoy your take, but that opening just felt kind of off to me, maybe I'm looking to deep into it
but I felt like this is a step back from what you've shown you can do...
either way I enjoyed the quoted above...

v/Ullr, He came prepared, doing his research on his topic, as I should have
he brought stronger detail, and really used the characters and film to his advantage
it shows throughout the piece & makes it very enjoyable read.
as for Inno it seems like he's focused on other things at the moment to thoroughly write a verse this time around
which is fine, but I feel as it effected him in this battle, causing him to lose
although his opponent is a dope writer when he's on his shit. so this was still a cool battle
nice work fellas
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