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Zelph/Trip:

I didn't get the Penny Proud line, it went completely over my head. Drumroll line was nice IMO, not seen that before. I didn't get the DMV line either, must be an American thing, I can't really discredit you or that just being as real as I can. More penny-ish I don't understand? Is that the chick at hiw work or something? The child with the ass? I honestly don't know. Anyway, I've decided this is partly the writers fault for not giving us a clue in the setup or something as to what you're alluding to. Rust was okayish, nothing special wording wise to really make it land. It needs more venom behind it. Jodeci was a decent attempt at a wordplay, it works both ways so you were on the right track with it - again it's just worded a little poorly. Overly wordy, if anything, and maybe a bit played but I don't battle enough to know if it still is so i'll give you the benefit of the doubt. Liquor/Poker is from a sign in The Simpsons and a whole other load of sign shits. How you worded it made it worse than the original too. LOL @ this. Kraken was okay-ish, but not for a closing line. You should've ended stronger IMO.

I didn't get DMV's opening line, again, that may be my fault so I won't count it against them. LOL @ Strik line, nicely done and injected some humour to it. I didn't get the Greenwich thing either, must be an american reference. I don't care enough to look it up. Sister Abigail was really nice, Lever 2000 was cool too. Nice back to back bars there. Bazooka shit was straight clowning lol, BMX was okay, last line was brutal for the closer.

DMV got it. Ouch at the last line though...