I felt it was pretty solid over all, but some parts left me re reading to try and catch the flow. For example:
touch hallowed ground with heaven imbued,
spirits sixth sense left us confused,
shots in the dark, I followed the
pretty incense of bottled perfume.
^ the third line threw me the fuck off
in the thick of it all, viscous resemblance
in liquid reflection & time ripples out
at the festival/ fair. it never was there.
and I saw before you: the fade
and the cut.
... most of this sections, I mean I like what youre saying, but I lose the flow in a train wrecking fashion.
Other than that, dope writing.
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