2000, Solid end rhymes in the opener paired with nice imagery. The mid and end had points were flow ended abruptly, smoother transitions would have enhance the read. Imagery mixed with storytelling was solid tho. Didn't really like your ending at all tho. I see what you tried to do but you really need to come more full circle to get away with it imo.
Razah, came out the gate vividly in a way the reflected the topic. Nothing fancy with your schemes but solid end rhymes and natural internals kept it moving. Unique angles at concepts, tears from the sky line for example, stayed fresh. Consistent throughout, no lines missed for me.
V/ Both came on topic and had a solid use of imagery. I felt Razahs was more vivid and enjoyable for me. Mechanics wise, 2000 was more flash at times but also choppy at other points. Razah was balanced and consistent. For these reasons and others that shall remain secret,
+1 Razah
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