Original? nah, He'll receive punches since he's a dork & he seems frail,
He'll be a Rolex Replica; Once hands touch Tic in the face & Knockoff every detail.
This Outsider mascot is Drake soft, I throw slugs, he can catch it,
everyone In Outlet 'em believe he's Charged up, I'm here to Pull the plug on this faggot.
That RB loss was like Dance Revolution, u got cooked cause ur stuff is weak;
He tried going toe to toe with Aero's and still looked like a fuckin geek.
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These sections were pretty dope, that opener was pretty nice
I thought harden in the clutch could have been delivered better..still a decent idea
I wasn't really feeling that closer, but you still came correct here
some pretty good stuff here, dope verse
Ya Punches are weak & lite. “Up & coming?” Don’t believe the hype…
Listen. Your Knuckle crack & bleed - Mine the type to make Karaoke leave the sight
This dude doesn’t live it. I’m nice w/ arms, provin ya timid
When I cock it back & let the Four-Banger go..it’ll sound like I blew up a Civic
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I felt like you really picked up towards the end, the opening was alright
the whole beginning felt like it was too wordy & the set ups were ok at best
if you took the time to work out your verse like the above quoted it would have worked
otherwise I felt like the end was your strongest part of your performance
the motor function line would have been dope if you worded a little better imo
decent verse...
v/Unfuk, I felt he had a better string of punches as apposed to Tic
Tic came decent but he really picked up at the end, but by then it was too late
nice battle fella's
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