[Mr. J]

Day and night would blend like screwdrivers.
and in the historic whirlpool they engulfed sanitizers.
riding the vessel while in hiding embezzled his life support.
invent it's intention as we raised it once every fortnight.
but this invention was living but living a short life.

Ribbit, I felt like this was one of your better outings as of late
seems like you are letting loose finally and aren't overcompensating
with that being said, I enjoyed how that quoted section above blended together
this seems more natural of you, short bursts of ideas always brings more to the table
while trying to write out a paragraph on one idea seems to effect you in a negative way
this of course is not one of those moments I enjoyed your presentation here..

Catastrophe is here- No countdown for the chaos
The world was bright, like they sketched it out with crayons
Now- Praying for a glimpse of light for the years that we cried
But, the world's as dark as all the tears from the sky
As the world unravels & we're saving the strands
I can't help but picture the souls engraved in the land

this was an interesting take on the concept, I enjoyed it as well
I feel like you are one of the better up & coming writers around town
well I guess you aren't necessarily new but you have a real smooth flow
it works to your advantage as well & you incorporate it into your pieces nicely
with as much time as you had left I would have liked to see more as well
I didn't really like how you ended this, the wording seemed kind of off
but Ribbit went for the same idea by ending it in the same format, so I cannot hate..
plus I did that as well...ha...either way this was a dope piece brah...

v/This one is actually tough, I really enjoyed both concepts
where Ribbit lacked in smoothness Razah picked up and kept it moving
but Ribbit still came with a dope piece that made me feel idk happy
it's nice to see both writers go at a set limit and execute their own take on an idea
ribbit came more descriptive than usual, while Razah came more poetic in my mind...
ehhhhhhh I think I'm going to have to go with Razah
I feel like he delivered the full package, but this could go either way in my eyes
dope battle fella's



v/Razah