"Pour yourself another cup of denial."
love this sentence^
Limbo feels like hell.
Interesting. Last night I though of a good line using the word Limbo.
Some of them want to be abused.
Sweet dreams are made of this.
...some clever rhymes in this if read properly, i.e. drag my name / venom in my veins
and, in the same area- name through the mud / erase you if i could
I like the way this flows, and the conceptual descriptions, and the healthy sprinkle of rhymes...
You pushed the envelope too much on your other post "I met a girl on Tinder". By that I mean, no rhymes, and not as concise or descriptive.. Thus even if the writing in that1 is "good", it is overshadowed by the fact that it did not live up to your standards, or "pull the reader in"... Unlike this one btw... This piece is more of the "sweet spot" IMO
Last edited by Pharaohs Army; 08-04-2015 at 01:02 PM.
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