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Old 08-02-2015, 12:52 AM   #2
Vulgar
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"Limbo feels like hell. Heaven feels mundane. Purgatory resident."

The end here was dope. Honestly, the way I read this throughout, it had moments of interesting fragments, but it stopped and started like a car that stalls out every other street. At some points, I couldn't get used to the paragraph style enough. I've written some poetry in this way before, I understand that it's an irresistable structural approach. Just wasn't feeling most of this. It did remind me of a gothic-like anime episode... I was watching "The Twelve Kingdoms" today but decided to stop after 3 episodes.

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