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Old 07-29-2015, 03:26 PM   #10
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u wont dish one out on me bro, this guys in need of direction
cuz whenever its U-Verse me you'll never make a stable connection
NCPD? u and ur fag crew of pigs always runnin round givin niggas hell
oh u not gay? so y the fuk we always see u posted in another niggas cell
in the streets im a Young Thug, ill snatch ur chick & bring u pain
cuz the way ill take ya Baby from you, they'll think ur Lil Wayne

^^^^
this whole section was nice, I didn't really enjoy that opener though
I felt like you could have made that punch work a little better
the set up had me anticipating a dope line but you didn't really deliver
that closer was kinda meh as well, not really how you'd want to close a verse
either way nice little verse here..

Ur lips look like confetti....let me paint the picture
U get outta line ur momma cry wycleft? But no1 gonna save this Haiti victim
U broke an queer an ya face is gross an weird
little rascal got a hair lip part that'd make alfalfa reconsider his whole career
But let's let bygones be bygones...i kno wen I'm wrong
How many lips does it take to screw in a lightbulb? None. He cleft the light on.

^^^^^
I lol'd at this whole section, the forklift operator line was cool
but it kind of threw me off when you were on a steady roll
either way I thought this whole section was really lulz worthy
that closer was pretty cool as well, but this section took the cake

v/I'm going to have to go with Bags on this one, his verse was more entertaining
I thought Zelph held his own but in the end that opener and closer hurt him a bit
both went in though and it made an enjoyable battle, but Bags was very consistent
dope battle fella's
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