wow this was awesome. two soldiers writing about their real life experiences in the army. it felt like a documentary. would work as a collab really. almost doesn't seem right to try to pick one over the other but here I go.
just write - good work. the boot camp part really had a good flow and cadence. really the whole piece did. you had a very good use of inners in it. and the honesty was really refreshing. not sure how many soldiers would admit that they almost had a panic attack when they first saw some action. but that's what made it so real and enjoyable for me. really enjoyed reading it.
no good - ya another dope retelling of your experience. the flow wasn't as complex as just writes, but in its simplicity it almost makes it more spittable. so I think it would sound good. your piece brought out a bit more emotion within me. it was kinda depressing me at the end. which is powerful,meaning you brought out feelings in the reader. good shit.
very tough battle to vote on. very similar verses. I enjoyed reading them a lot and actually might re read them which I have never done.
vote - no good
I have no idea why, but his resonated with me a little more so he gets the slight edge here. props to both
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