Adonis: Kinda straight to the point, no if's or but's. Keeps it on topic throughout. Decent peace but nothing that really led me to the ''wow''-factor, kinda heard most of what you said before just with different words. The last stanza was the best tho', wrapped it all up and left me with a good impression. Solid piece, but nothing mindblowing other than ''nods'' and ''yeah, I agree''. That's totally fine but it would be cool to see you go all-out on something rather than writing something ''safe''.
ZeeDee: Great storytelling and imagery. The flow was fluent and I managed to read through it all without any pauses etc., I liked the structure and the transitions from one line to another were smooth. The conclusion of your verse was pretty cool as well. I think one of the main reasons I liked your verse is because I've spent whatever free time I got the past days to watch Hell on Wheels so it helped me getting drawn into the atmosphere you were trying to make. The conclusion/last lines left an even sour taste of ''humans fucking suck sometimes..''. Very well written throughout and the topic was on point as well.
Vote: Adonis had a pretty good verse but I think ZeeDee got this without doubt when it comes to consistency, flow, conclusion and execution of the topic at hand. Cool battle.
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