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Old 07-26-2015, 11:42 AM   #7
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Ullr wrote a story about mother earth and a new ice age I believe. This was again, some very veteran writing, nearly zero errors..."waves ripples" didn't jell, but other than that, this verse was spot on. Great imagery and explanation behind the end of mankind.

Inno had some errors here... IT encapsulates. As well as a few typos such as misspelling THE. the metaphors were dope though. The time traveler and dying with negatives. So the talent is evident, and these are my two overall favorite verses of the week easily, fitting you two met.

While ullr had the superior verse in terms of everything aesthetic, flow, transitions imagery, even story it self, inno had some great metaphors tucked inside. Unfortunately he coupled them with 4 simple errors, thus giving his opponent the edge. When you have two great verses, as a voter I'm forced to nit pick. Thus


Ullr.
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