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Old 07-24-2015, 02:11 PM   #7
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You been sellin ya wack mixtapes on the streets them shits should be free whore.
Cuz I know from personal experience that no one followin Aero unless its a detour.
Gettin dudes drunk, so they can big you up Aero? I'm not sure what u think it solves.
Ask any sober vet about him, they say this bud light with no drinks involved.

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wtf @ the font though...anyway I thought these were the harder hitting punches
the gas station line was smooth but needed a better set up in my opinion...
the eHarmony, Bourne, lines seemed kind of old to me and just really obvious
maybe if you had a better approach they would have came off better nah'mean?
either way nice verse...

he pm'ed for advice on his bars, I'm like who is this dumb hoe?
didn't think I'd use Algebra again but here I am trying to solve for the unknown
this backwards hippy broke as fuck, new apparel you really need some
last time you had a pair of shoos you asked two women for a threesome

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this was probably the better executed part of your verse...
that go daddy line was pretty funny but I hate set ups like that either way
I wasn't really feeling the Bland line just because the whole thing seemed off
other than that I felt like you executed a well rounded verse

v/Aero, I feel he just executed a better set of punches and decent set ups
Yppih seemed to be off his game and that font really had me fucked up..
had he weaved some better lines together it may have worked better in the end
but I feel like Aero swept this out from under his feet with that closer
/seewhatIdidthere
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