Timeless - I felt like your piece was about to start to become something but then it just went to a full stop. You went for the minimum requirement when it comes to lines so I don't know if you were pressed for time and just wanted to show or whatever but it's dope that someone died seeing how there's 9 people in the pic and 8 people there in real life so who knows wtf happened to the last dude. Short piece, would have loved to read more.
Ullr - Four lines in and I enjoy what I'm reading, your action packed story got my attention. Rhymescheme is cool enough as well. Decent closure to the piece. Overall though it's a bit too short for me the way you went about it, and I thought that it never really managed to gain any serious momentum.
Vote - All in all I felt Ullr had a more complete showing in this battle and due to this he snatches my vote.
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So deep into writing I'm concerned bout the text on my grave.
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