[Objective]

Ribbit - Try to make the first two lines poignant, something that catches the readers attention. I'd also advice trying to do the same with your last 2 lines as you want the reader to leave with the same positive feel as it went going into your piece. That said I can tell your kind of new to this so I'm going to drop some pointers as well; try to get rid of fillers or lines that doesn't say that much, a

Also, punctuation and grammar is kind of important in certain aspects of your piece with the structure you're using here. I'm mainly thinking about this couplet:
Alive and well. She's a copper I haven't delight to brand.
Even without her Life will unlikely grind on bland.
^ First line is fine, second line needs a comma or something before ''Life'' because I had to stop and read the line twice to understand what you meant. I first started reading; ''Even without her life'' and understood that wasn't right. At least a minimum is required when it comes to this in order to tell the story right to the reader without abrupt stops, everyone should strive to remove those. The better the piece flows as people read on, the better the overall impression your piece will get when it reaches the end as well. Believe it or not but that can be a determining factor when people place their votes.

Your second verse is better in that regard but I feel the sentences stretch out too much towards the end for them to do anything for me and the rhyming is a bit off.
The first two lines in the third verse doesn't rhyme or flow that well in my opinion but the concept is pretty dope. If you had spent some extra time polishing up the rhymes as well it could have been a pretty fucking dope couplet and perhaps the highlight of the battle. Love how the story seem to go together in the third verse but you've been slacking on the rhymes a bit in this piece.

If I was you I'd spend a bit more time polishing up the rhymes and the flow so it doesn't jump too much from one line to the next and remove fillers/sentences that doesn't do anything special to your piece other than dragging it out. Basically try to conceptualize what you want to go for in terms of story or whatever a little bit better and go from there, refine the story as a whole when it's written by deleting/adding lines and polish up the rhyming/flow (trying to stay within a certain syllable count like 12-16 syllables per line or something can help with that) and you'll go a long way. I have a strong feeling you're going to improve a lot throughout this season of the AOWL. Looking forward to see you grow.

Tyson - Props for showing at least. Needless to say I've definitely read a lot better from you, the only thing that's better in your piece vs. Ribbit's submission was the flow here and there. The story and long sentences didn't really do anything for me either. But ye, at least you showed.

Vote - Ribbit. A better story that could need some serious polishing as a stand alone piece in a few areas I've noted above. Tyson's verse was just there for the sake of showing so I don't feel this needs to be explained further. Ribbit takes my vote.