Netcees - View Single Post - Week 1: Ribbit vs. Tyson- TYSON WINS 4-3

Pinot Grij · 07-22-2015, 06:24 PM

Ribbit - I honestly had no idea what was going on here. It was all over the place. Because I see it happen so often, when I see a verse that is so abstract, then I revert to my longheld assumption that certain topicalists are just opaque for opacity's sake. As if making a verse incomprehensible somehow makes it deep and enigmatic and a puzzle worth solving. I disagree. Fuck, "calypto" and "meninogomy" aren't even words for Christ's sake.

Tyson, you suffered from what I suffered from this week, which is a mild case of who-gives-a-fuck. Some lines didn't add up for me.. the 2, 3, 4, 5 line went over my head.. and generally I thought the lines carried on a bit too long and could've been edited down for cohesion. I wish you attempted a more conclusive ending instead of it just seeming like an abrupt stop (which it kind of was). But since you had something resembling a story and a relatable story arc, I give this battle to you.

Vote -- Tyson

07-22-2015, 06:24 PM	#11
Pinot Grij Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 863 Battle Record: 23-19 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night 2 - Write Week V - Netcees Battle League (2x) - Winter Topical II - 1-2 Punch league Rep Power: 29195064	Ribbit - I honestly had no idea what was going on here. It was all over the place. Because I see it happen so often, when I see a verse that is so abstract, then I revert to my longheld assumption that certain topicalists are just opaque for opacity's sake. As if making a verse incomprehensible somehow makes it deep and enigmatic and a puzzle worth solving. I disagree. Fuck, "calypto" and "meninogomy" aren't even words for Christ's sake. Tyson, you suffered from what I suffered from this week, which is a mild case of who-gives-a-fuck. Some lines didn't add up for me.. the 2, 3, 4, 5 line went over my head.. and generally I thought the lines carried on a bit too long and could've been edited down for cohesion. I wish you attempted a more conclusive ending instead of it just seeming like an abrupt stop (which it kind of was). But since you had something resembling a story and a relatable story arc, I give this battle to you. Vote -- Tyson __________________ Topical C.R.E.A.M.