Ha, nice little cameo and wrap up at the end. As for the rest of the piece, I felt you started a bit slow and to be frank I felt the first 5 lines could have been omitted for something more poignant. The rest of the lines were pleasant, particularly when you read it the second time, one gets to notice the subtleties, words like "perspective and "capture" that you use before revealing the identity of the narrator. Aside from the beginning, I felt almost all the other lines etched a clue into the frame of mind of the narrator, his internal camera. To me, it felt in the beginning you were somewhat directionless or better said you knew a direction, but did not know yet how to commence the route toward your planned goal, in other words the execution at first was somewhat off. But, the rest was enjoyable. Nicely done Mr. J.
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