This was dope. I appreciated both takes equally. The change from reverence to disgust was cool, I thought it was a nice dual perspective. I thought it wore a little thin towards the end, it was more melodramatic than it needed to be. I really liked Razah's piece, especially the feeling of being forced into a less fitting lifestyle for the people of the narrator, it was worded well throughout and really spoke out strongly for that part.
I'd have to give this one to Razah.
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Originally Posted by PancakeBrah
I'm going to start off on a tangent.
when I write, lately, I feel as if I begin by stringing together ambient ideas and concepts, then i realize I'm just typing the words coffee, tawdry, and autumn over and over and over, again, then I pass out dru-
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