[Mr. J]

Unborn, I really enjoy how you opened your verse, the flow was smooth
the way you just ease your way through these lines makes it so interesting
it's easier to follow once you use the right amount of words & rhymes
I think the most interesting part was when you got to this point...

Hopelessness,
It’s like being deprived of your psyche’s oxygen
And then mentally forced into a violent catalyst
But, we’re no match, they have giant battleships
Equipped with behemoth cannons that breach our palace.
My whole family has disappeared underneath the madness,

I thought the catalyst/battleships thing was pretty dope
the rest was classic Unborn...nice work bruh

Razah, it's nice to see you partake in the AOWL as well as the Martyrs league
you really bring a different vibe from the other writers which is refreshing
I really enjoyed your verse, I didn't like that little opener though...
I understand what you were going for but I feel like that was ill fitting for the piece
maybe it's just me, either way I really liked this part right here.

The simplicity is beautiful, your kind is divided by hatred
Anguish - But us, everything we need is provided by nature
We're in tune with the world, live life the way it's meant to be
Get a feel for everything around you, even the wind has its own melody

that was just a dope little section, I look forward to reading more from you
I thought this was a smooth verse but I would have liked to see you dive deeper
either way dope verse..

V/I'm going to have to give this to Unborn, he had a complete verse as opposed to Razah
but Razah didn't slouch too much to really touch up on anything, I just wanted more from his verse
I really enjoyed both writers and it's great to see them join the AOWL
always enjoyable reading from Unborn, and Razah will be making a come up further down the road
nice work fella's