yes very cool battle here.
Adonis - I hated the beginning sequence tbh. but I know what you were going for. it was very poetic but just didn't flow well enough for my taste. after that first stanza it really picked up. I enjoyed it thoroughly. was a good over view of a soldier and how they are brain washed, which really happens. that's what I took from it and you did a very good job with this piece.
zee dee - it was a very in depth story about the native americans fighting for their land and survival. you took your time with the story telling. which is something I have trouble doing sometimes, I cant drag shit out to this length and keep it entertaining. but u did. good work. flow and structure wasn't outstanding, but it was adequate, the word selection was top notch.
ya very close battle. hard to decide but I gotta go with the more entertaining verse and that was
vote- zee dee
I really liked both verses. good job guys. thanks for the reads
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