ribbit
Quote:
'Lock'
I'm sparing my flames
Filled my beauty with satire
I'm Iocked in it now
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I don't really get this.
Quote:
'Load'
Arm myself with ammo
Gun bars nah just sympathy
For my enemy
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Somewhat cool, a little awkward sounding with the 'nah' feature.
Quote:
'Fire'
Bodyguard the shots
Kevin Costner and Whitney
Bullets in Houston
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lol interesting. On the vague side but I think I see what you were trying to do. The topic was summer, which this approached at from an open-ended use of the word 'heat' I guess.
Witty
Quote:
Stop.
Right there where you stand
watch as your power expands
you are but a beast.
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Cool.
Quote:
Look.
For over the hill
come hunters; foes for the kill
remember the fight.
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Didn't like this.
Quote:
Listen.
Nature calls your name,
mourning a warrior; maimed,
she misses your touch.
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Cool.
Rakontur
Quote:
POWER
Energy; Light source
Greed consumes til box entombed
Ideals beam, bright bulb
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There's a lot here, a little stuffy IMO.
Quote:
FUELS
Quickly, feed on weak
Devour hope, poor won't cope
Energize, repeat
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Kinky, I like.
Quote:
DEATH
Silver lining is...
Sun rises, blackens corpses
Summer good, most hopeless
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Really disliked the third line, which was off by one syllable. Otherwise this had potential.
Alright so this was an off kilter battle, I'm not really a fan of haikus myself personally. You guys did decent here, displaying different approaches. ribbit I thought your third haiku was stylish. Witty, your method was baritone, getting your point across in one of the three for me. Rakontur had the best one of the battle with the energy one. It was cool.
My vote goes to
Rakontur by a hair.
Thank you guys for taking this three-way battle on short notice.