Gina - You bring depth to your haikus, I like that. Snow angels was playful and had a christmas feel to it, cool shit. Nice closure to the theme you were given with the last haiku as well, great showing imo.
Silver - Bringing that fire as always but you fucked up the syllable count which brought it down a notch. Still love the fucking twerk team surprise completely messing up the twist at the end which a lot of haikus have and putting it to the start of the haiku instead, smart move. And I completely agree on the beats thing but I'm having a hard time relating it to winter other than the The Winter Apathy beat on Eastern Philosophies. I agree with money as well and it certainly brings excitement when christmas presents are opened on christmas eve. Dope showing.
Vote - After hours of going back'n'forth between who to pick my vote is going to Gina. Entertaining battle, haha.
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