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Old 04-24-2013, 02:03 PM   #2
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Nice little piece here. I like how you word the lines like:
under pressure, pleasure...whatever

It's catchy, makes all the words rhyme and it's enjoyable. This piece would be better though if it was longer lol. That's my only complaint. You seem like you know what you're doing so I'll leave it at that. But if you want more people to feed your pieces you should probably feed others. Keep droppin man.
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