Zen - Slick, I really liked your last section. The rhyming tied this together and wasn't sticky, like a substance the reader didn't desire in the first place. It was welcome because the syllabic content was balanced, and the writing was clear.
Dr Dog - It was brave to attempt this because it's difficult to relate the past to the present, especially muskets to iPads. The poem was coated in rust, representing that all periods of time, all epochs, are equally shown under the light of 'historicism'. Reliance on evasive technology (transhumanism is coming, after all) is inevitable, but also means that we're not as independent as we think. The revolutionary war comparison is apt, and I thought your rendition was cool.
My vote goes to Zen. I found it to be more satisfying but this was a tight battle.
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