Adonis: Each piece I read of yours gives a great poetic vibe to it. Reading it makes it seem like you write this effortlessly. Amazing really. Anyway to this piece in particular pretty great story here. Children brainwashed into nationalism where the love of your country is even more important than your own family. Powerful stuff there. The ending was quite fitting as well as a way of saying "the job is you" basically saying that your friend could be your enemy in the next moment. Least that's how I took it. Great writing here I enjoyed this.
ZeeDee: Wow. Excellent. This seems like a Native American villager watching the Europeans come in and commit genocide because of their refusal to worship the church. Great storytelling here but more importantly I was impressed with your scheming in the second portion of this. You kinda sneak in rhymes on the readers that makes you have to go back and reread it lol. Talented stuff here and I really enjoyed this piece. Props.
I think this is the closest battle I've read so far and I think this one's gonna come down to the wire, but I gotta go with ZeeDee. This one can go either way though.
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