Objective: Probably the best piece I've read of yours. It seemed to me you tried to keep the reader guessing as to what the piece was about until near the very end which is a great thing to do in my opinion. Once I finished it what I took from it was a quote from Bruce Lee. "Life is a daily decrease. Discard the nonessentials." Correct me if I'm wrong about that lol. But that's what I took from this. Simple is better and don't get caught up in the bullshit. Nice piece here.
Innovator: First off, I laughed when I saw edited for spelling lol. But to the piece I'm guessing that this character in this piece is one of the poor minds? Still I'm not too sure about this piece to be honest Inno. The first portion was not on par with your verse last week which I really enjoyed. The best part of this piece was definatly the last stanza talking about him being king of thieves. Excellent writing in that section and I think with more writing like that you could have won this.
Overall I gotta give this to Objective.
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