Ribbit: A lot of multis and flow but not much was anchored in a coherent meaning. Ironically, this disrupts the flow of the verse and makes much harder to follow when reading. Poetry is most powerful to me when rhyme and imagery combine to paint the canvas of your minds eye. If you don't fine, but recognize a reader trying to find a hidden image in your colorful chaos will step away dizzy and disappointed if the piece is disjointed.
Vulgar: Interesting piece. Read like literature, which to a bookworm like me is a fruitful approach. But I think it was scosh rushed, I mean it had a lot of quotes but I found I couldn't quote much. This is the kind of delicate piece that needs a slow touch. Subtle entendre, veiled glances at meaning, then stop and leave them feigning for more... or get deep and leave them with something to ponder. I liked the defiance of rhyme in the verse, it's just the scene I wasn't fond of. A board room meeting is boring, there was room for more drama.
Vote: Vulgar - I liked the creativity of his approach, and it connected well with the topic. While I'm not even really certain what ribbits piece was about, so that makes it kind of hard to vote for him.
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