Innovator, a strong entry. Not much to say about it, I enjoyed it. I think you depicted the theme well, although the message itself was platonic. Nevertheless, it carried out its miltary duty.
Fraze: I interpreted this as a soldier who did not receive any spoil of war, instead he became disillusioned with the cause and became lost in the sea of turmoil, via mind altering substances and all other experiences that come with their ingestion. The people you meet, and their mindsets get implanted onto one's world view. I did think that the beginning wandered too much, and you spent too much time depicting the entrenchment of the narrator after the trenches, rather than time they did in the trench, which would of added some more credibility to the piece, and be less lighthearted, which I felt this piece needed, some more maturity implanted into its content.
Vote: Innovator
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