Razah, well done. I hated "but even that has evolved in it", but everything else was great. I'm glad you kept it short and ended it where you did because that takes BALLS. Good stuff.
Buddha I agreed with your message more than I did Razah's, and honestly your verse was great. What hurts your stuff, in my opinion, is that you do too much. "Gaseous sulfur", really killed me. Just saying sulfur would be much cleaner, especially since you've already said it's going into the clouds we understand that's its a gas, dig? I like you, and I like your writing, but I think it'd be much better if you cleaned it up a bit, man.
V/Razah
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