Innovator, I think you executed what a better version of what I was trying to do with my verse this week. Really great work. While the story was great, I really liked you coming back to the "sea" theme (nice use of green and red to paint the picture as well). This is VOTW from what I've read so far.
I'm not sure how I feel about your verse, fraze. Honestly I think the opening hurt you quite a bit. It was a good idea in theory to come with a lighter verse since Inno came pretty heavy, but I just don't think it was done well enough to beat him. The middle to end was much better, so who knows who I'd be voting for if you wrote that way the beginning.
V/Inno
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