I thought both could have come better. Buddha's verse had some intriguing imagery but I didn't understand what he was alluding to in either the last or first verse.
I enjoyed fraze's brevity and the evolution line, but the first two lines were clunky as was the ending.
I have to give it to Buddha for more descriptive zeal
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Originally Posted by PancakeBrah
I'm going to start off on a tangent.
when I write, lately, I feel as if I begin by stringing together ambient ideas and concepts, then i realize I'm just typing the words coffee, tawdry, and autumn over and over and over, again, then I pass out dru-
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