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Old 07-11-2015, 04:19 PM   #12
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Ace has to beg to get laid, I almost feel bad for the kid,
Some dudes put pussy on a pedestal…he Shanghai towers the shit.

When we talk guns, this dude shits his pants lately,
If the heat wave in the air, he runs inside, closes his blinds and turn on the A/C.
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these were the stand outs from your verse, I felt what followed kinda flucked it up
I laughed at the A/C line but I felt you could have used daily instead of lately...
that would have sounded better to me...decent verse though


I'll fuckin bruise this mark..
One punch. You'll take longer to get on ur feet than a fuckin evolution chart.
This is top notch, homie. What I got in store is rude..
When YOU get in the Mix.. whack is the solvent n i'll mop the floor with you.

Now the safety off, hammer cocked, my gun antics insane..
I'll give you the Trig work that'd put mathematics to shame.

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these lines were pretty nice, I enjoy a verse that you have to break down
I really enjoyed that 'evolution' reference to be honest, that mop line was slick too
the trig line was pretty cool, some of the rest could have worked...
but I think you did work...

v/Ace, he delivered a harder impacting in my opinion, Swerve was cool too
but I feel like had he left out the ace in the hole & came with something different it would be evenly matched
other than that I got Ace winning this due to consistency
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