Ribs - First off I read this shit as so fragmented, just thought weaving in and out regardless of connection to each other. Like a fast paced action flick, John Whick type shit, so this is a good thing. The problem I did come across while enjoying the read is some times it just didn't click in sync... "I'm not trimming the procedures. Humiliate I'm discerned forgotten world." I see the jumbled effect you presented. A world in a world in a world type writing. It's confusing to say the least, the style you went with here.
V - Going to be a tough vote. You too went fast paced but more direct in plain sight to the average reader then your counter part. Your verse moved swift and finished just as it began. I know you posses the potential to chop and screw this verse to the maximum enjoyment but you went short and sweet.
Ribbit
A simple reason, I took away more from his verse the more I read then from Vulgar. Ribbit's verse seemed like he was speaking from the perspective of Earth and his changes and effects and causes and yadda yadda yadda. It seemed like he went for depth while Vulgar was more eloquent, just lacked the insight as far as introspective, which I enjoy above all else.
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