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Originally Posted by Mr. J
Bet your top dollar this is murder, nah this accidental, let's blanket dawwwg
I had you backwards, & hit you with a 'cro'bar to turn you into J's son Todd
this is ok, but too wordy in the punch. if you try to force in too much word play people will read it as forced
my verses are acid flowers that grow wild, & suit the style I give
when he write verses. he think gold blooms I'm like nah "Thats one big pile of shit"
nice poetic bar. this style can work, but you need to have a better flip if you want this to hit in a battle verse. cool idea, but needs to be harsher.
If dude calls me a bitch, I'll slap this pussy, I'm a boss. it's about to show fam
keep it drug related & put bread on his head & call him Powdered Toast Man
concept is there, but more silly than hard hitting
the last battle I was in was Shadow boxing, "What's the risk?" he's asking
You dope? bring that list in, 'cause I'll play Ali this time around & just eclipse this faggot
nah. should pass on this
this was on a whim, he's prolly doing research in a Batman tshirt gloating at home
I find it funny cause the irony shows..that I have another dead man ghosting my posts
nice concept, but if you want this to hit, you have to set up the punch better. why is there another dead man ghosting you? set up the flip to work two ways.
if he beats the breaks off me, I'll just get gassed & take it to his own lane
maybe that explains the whole reason I got up in that ass like it was road rage
this is basically filler. skip these bars.
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Originally Posted by Orc
I'm the Last King of Freshness. I'll Blind u 4 being frail wen u see trouble
Ya Teeth'll make a Lasting Impression.. & u'll read Braille offa Each Knuckle
nice concept. cool bar
J won't make a killer post here. YOOO -> Is Jim a dope peer?
U'll Get Cut when the Nasal Stick Out... & u need to trim that Nose Hair
meh. this is ok but not a huge fan.
Fuck this Clowns smirking. Once the Louds working O's so Stellar
Doggg... You'll Catch A Body quickaa than Crowd Surfing at Coachella
nice. i liked this.
U still hot & street? Nah, u gotta be offed, honestly. It's gotta be
1 cut'll leave him witha Permanent Smile that'd make his Laughing Gas obsolete
nah. don't feel like you set this up well
It's so so wack that u tryna come with ''oh no!'' No Holds Facts
& how you Been Stalked I find it reaaaal ironic that You Don't Know Jack
nice punch, but the setup seems like filler
This dork bitch is gonna die. && Orc IS the God of Lime
Shit. U can check ANY Jewelry Store & realise Quartz is a Common find
cool punch
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This was a cool battle. I think Qwarterz had some interesting concepts, but he might still be adjusting to the differences between text battles and topicals. Basically, harsher wording and a strong emphasis on wordplay. If he can adjust and work on his concepts I think he'll do well.
It's nice to see Orc coming back into form. There were a few misses for me, but it was mostly a pretty solid verse. Looking forward to reading more and I hope he maintains the consistency.
Vote: Orc