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Pinot Grij · 07-09-2015, 08:02 PM

Bust, the Heavy D line was alright, but it kinda implies the exact opposite of the song title, no? That took away from it for me. I thought the closer was solid. Every other line, I was reading through waiting for a punchline to connect to something else in the couplet and it never really connected for me.

Cred, pretty heavy on the gun bars... your attempts connected better than Bust's imo. Rodman had potential but was worded poorly. Designer sweaters, Jesus piece, and /indian tribe were all enough to edge this one out.

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07-09-2015, 08:02 PM	#9
Pinot Grij Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 863 Battle Record: 23-19 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night 2 - Write Week V - Netcees Battle League (2x) - Winter Topical II - 1-2 Punch league Rep Power: 29195064	Bust, the Heavy D line was alright, but it kinda implies the exact opposite of the song title, no? That took away from it for me. I thought the closer was solid. Every other line, I was reading through waiting for a punchline to connect to something else in the couplet and it never really connected for me. Cred, pretty heavy on the gun bars... your attempts connected better than Bust's imo. Rodman had potential but was worded poorly. Designer sweaters, Jesus piece, and /indian tribe were all enough to edge this one out. Vote --> Cred __________________ Topical C.R.E.A.M.