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Old 07-08-2015, 09:32 PM   #5
Mr. J
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Claiming a Crooked lifestyle. Stand up Straight against me, it'll cost ya
when I'm done you'll be slumped in a chair... & that'll have nothin to do with bad posture
If there's "your favourite rapper" themed parties I'll be willing to bet wages
nobody ever goes Astray cos his bars been off the beaten track for ages

^^^
this section was pretty cool, that 'away with words' kind of killed your steam for me
I don't really enjoy the use of 'a way with words' that's just a no no from the jump for me
but you picked it back up with that urinal line which I thought was funny...smooth work

That’s fucked dude, it only means that you can’t fight or spar,
Ya’ verses are quite The Strain – So Fuck the season @Hush & write his bars.
My fists, Bruce Lee status. You don’t wan’ shoot the 5 w/ em ock,
Cross these hands… & yours will end up across your chest… inside of a box.

^^^
that little section was pretty slick, I enjoyed that the most as I read
that opener kind of went over my head as well, and the hazmat was ehh
alright...but that closer was enough to edge this out in your favor...

v/Dre, I felt he came with some better punches, even though a few were kinda eh
but Wanderer could have had this had he not used the 'a way with words' line
I felt like this was evenly matched as far as different styles go, pretty slick shit from both though
that hands folded line is what did it for me though...
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