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Old 07-08-2015, 09:20 PM   #5
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cuz you aint about that action, and I'm known for smoking pistols
so when I do drivebys on this actors set,it aint a motion picture
heard you treasure yah hoes twat, bro you should let her be
cuz I can easily get in her box and leave seeds on her buns, thats open sesame
for the record, you owe in 3, I wouldn't advise pressing your luck
cause I can rob you for your yah shine before those 180 seconds is up

^^^^
this whole section was flames, & I literally lol'd at 'open sesame'
that owe in 3 line almost snuck by me but I was like whaaaat..
as for the rest I didn't find too much that fit the bill for me...
otherwise I enjoyed the 'Lost Art' section, saying out loud sounds better than it looks
either way smooth verse...

Sorry brah, but I don't envy ur luck.
Hes always predicting disasters..I'm predicting his verse will never be anything but.

Wording sucks, concepts r gay, even ur hair is queer.
Seriously, how can u go back to the basics when u been stuck there for years.

^^^^
these were the stand outs for me, I enjoyed some of the other lines
but I felt your execution was kind of out of sync for me, but I rolled with it
I felt if you set up some of the other bars like these two, I would have had a tougher time voting
either way you did have some slick concepts & that was enjoyable for me.
otherwise, I think I have to go with Chyeahh...

v/Chyeahh, he came with some stronger lines, a few of them made me laugh
I actually forgot to quote that Mugsy line, that gave me a light chuckle as well
Art came through pretty clean to, I just felt his execution was unstable
either way both writers brought some smooth work to the table...
nice work fella's
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