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Originally Posted by Objective

I wasn't referencing the movie, book, title or anything at all. It has nothing to do with A Clockwork Orange as I only went by the character on the cover, dope af movie tho'. I thought about it as ''rainy days'', bad weather is often associated with a depressive mood so that's what I played off of (clichéd to death or not) and the main character losing face and feeling out of it (hence where the topic comes in and who I had in mind while writing it) and I also end it with the guy shooting off half his face seeing the blast go off which was what I trying to connect with the picture. You don't necessarily die from it but I thought fuck it and let it be. I was more hooked on the ''sunshine'' as a simile for the blast he saw getting a millisecond of sense that things are finally getting better before he died or whatever when I wrote it.

Keep in mind I was high af when I wrote it so I probably made a lot of connections that doesn't make as much sense sober, or to anyone at all, hah, but there's thought behind it. I'm not satisfied by the piece and I didn't have time to do the ''write high, edit sober''-thing either but that's my explanation.

As far as things I felt what people missed out on was that the middle stanza got a ABCDDCBA rhymescheme but I kind of expected that. Thanks for giving me an opportunity to put it to light, I seldom get to do that with what I write.

nice explanation. I was finding new readings every time I read your piece. it was poetically dense even tho it was a shorter verse. I need to do more playing with diff rhyme schemes.