Objective - This was a bit lackluster, for a couple of reasons. You didn't really have to use "rain" as the main focus of the piece. It could have served as a particular detail. Instead, you chose to give it central importance to the piece and it was a little on the weak side/vague in connection with a typical human mood or psyche. Rain is synonymous with dreariness and being worn out, down with the blues, etc. I got that aspect of the topic relation. It just wasn't stirring, the language felt very flat, IMO. Thanks for showing.
fraze - This was well written and rhymed, your threw in bravado and braggadocio for good measure. The mood throughout was confident and I was left hoping there were more stanzas because the execution was nice. Overall, good work.
My vote goes to fraze.
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