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Ribbit - Atypical abab couplet rhymescheme basically throughout the whole piece. This read more like a regular topical than anything else. What I'm getting at is that in a league like this I kind of look for something else than a typical OM-piece in terms of structure. I mean, you've never had the freedom to write any way you like and you go for the safest most people are familiar with. Let loose, go crazy, get rid of everything you know about writing in rap-form and just have fun kind of. I'm not saying you didn't have fun writing this but I hope you get what I mean?

As far as the piece itself goes it's OK, I guess you're kind of new new to writing so that's dope because this league can truly let you experiment with concepts and set ups and nobody will question you if you don't rhyme or the rhymescheme isn't good enough etc., because it's the poem as a whole and its motives that's in focus. You sticked to the topic and that part I felt you did pretty good so props for that.

Keep it up, looking forward to see your progress in the league.

Sn00p - Quatrain ABAB rhymescheme, pretty standard but it almost never go wrong. You follow through with a pretty easy to follow flow and great imagery followed with great use of words. Fluent from start to finish, might be my fav poem so far in this tourney, good showing man.

Vote - Sn00p for an overall better showing. Ribbit; looking forward to see you get better, stay up.