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I really liked Fraze's piece here, mainly because I was writing recently on how math is the language of the universe so I could relate heavily to a lot of what he wrote about, fractles, Mandelbrot Sets, the planets and universes expansion etc.

It was done really well and I'm not too well versed on poetry categories or how to judge them, but this was good to me. Real appealing. We share a common interest so it was instantly relatable to me and struck a chord with me as a reader.

Objective - This was a well written verse, I thought the use of rain was a good evocative device to employ. An extended metaphor unraveling from that might of helped you here, maybe, with something to tie in the characters tears and the rain drops and a person at a distance not being able to distinguish one from the other, maybe? Just an idea I had when reading. The end was a sufficient but I maybe would have used something again in this piece to end by tying in something to do with the rain again, you know? To give the impression of the piece - and this cycle (be that death, life, love etc) - coming full circle and being never ending. Again, it's just an idea that struck me but I figured that was more fitting. Something polarising rather than the atypical topical ending with death resolving it all.

Two great verses but I'm giving Fraze the edge here, more so through personal preference than anything else as I could fully connect to what he was saying and the route he took conceptually. Good battle!

Vote - Fraze