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Old 07-05-2015, 12:02 AM   #2
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This was pretty great Zen, I enjoyed the progression
the transitioning from one moment to the next is well done
it's a terrific story put together with very few words
but you capture the beauty of it all at the end, which caps it off
I enjoyed it, keep writing breh..
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