Felt like ullr wrote a single moment in the story. Very well written and exciting tbh the begining to me was set up nicely for the middle parts and ending. Tho if im honest i felt like the story you told could of expanded more. It was great but for it left me wanting more. I dunno i felt like i was reading a great lead up and then it was over. Thays my gripe. Technically sound all around and well written. So i went with what i thought was a weak point which tbh wasnt alot but....
As far as what clitbox wrote. I felt like he outshines you with a more detailed lleveld paced story. Dunno if that makes sense lol. It felt more complete as a whole to me. Clitbox wrote some very intriguing lines that kept me interested throughout thw entire story. And once it was done i felt good about it. Like yeah i can see that ending that way. Great stuff foreal.
Overall i gotta go with clitbox on this one i thought dude dropped a dope piece that not only complimented his opponents effort but surpassed his opponent. Great story telling and the ability to keep that great story going won this battle for me.
Clitbox
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