[Sn00p]

When I'm shooting, rare that my pistol misses..
Get this, my shots goin' straight to ya top like a hit of guiness.
^uhm, either u're talking about shots of guiness which makes not a lot of sense since nobody drinks shots of that, or the connection is just go to the top/head like alcohol. which is kinda basic. idk. this could'a been way better if u incorporated the shots part & maybe evn expanded more on the concept. becuz the connection u had was a little simple and cud'a been fresher
Rapping isn't for you, pick a new career Greed,
Cuz tonight i'm catching a body like a high school cheer team..
^again, this could'a been dope. but the delivery is kinda statementish & simple. it cud'a been smth like "run up on u w/ the gang / i trust my team when it comes to catching bodies, like a high school cheer leader". not this exact flip, cuz i just made this up in seconds, but expand on the connection a bit more. cuz the idea was rly dope. it just needs a bit better delivery. still a good line overall.
Don't go soft Greedy, hold ya' toaster,
Fuck w/ me and arms goin up in the air like a roller coaster
^same as above. still decent
I am the lone beholder, I hold the people's chain..
Touch the belt n the hawks coming out no eagles game..
^okay, this is def a trend. u have good ideas, but expand on them some more to make the connection stronger so they have more impact. this was okay
Call my bullets muscle relaxers, and when I see'em?
He gettin the full body puncture w/o paying for spa treatment..
^decent
You kid? you're none the wiser,
Cuz you're getting killed for being Greedy... like Mekhi Phifer
^yea. same. use ur setups too. smth like "make u die for ur name" in the setup. or smth. but dont just do similes w/ a simple connections that's not enough nowadays
Agreeing to battle me? there's a price to pay
Fitting kid's name is ___, all I have to do is check mark to sign his life away
^eh. sign his life away? doesn't rly work for me

vs.

I read that long ass verse last week, terrible, seemed like voters felt the same way
..FUCK the parable lines you had, THAT was just a horrible misuse of nameplay
^uhm. pair a bill? or is there no wp? eh.
Ill litterally embarrass u, come here so i can smack that nerd face
Stupid nigga, u'd have a para... dimes shift to lesbian with that wack ass wordplay
^pair a dimes is rly played. i've seen it yrs ago and it was called played then. i get that u're saying that he uses that kinda wp, but he didn't use the exact wp iirc and u did.
Allen knight changed my name back to greed, and 4 that im gonna to make him pay
.. Dont change the fact ur blank expressions leaves voters with the same look anyways
^gonna to make? proofreading ur verses rly helps preventing these small typos that throw ppl off. this could'a been dope tho. like, the concept is nice. but the wording is kinda all over the place. if this had been a streamlined, concise line, it would'a hit for sure
Im real estate and you burger king, you can feel the hate in the murder scene
The only thing you'd reel estate of an emergency after i'd give the burner a squeeze
^okay. setup's kinda blah tho. i'm real estate, u're burger king? ehh. could'a made the connection a lot stronger in the 1st line. the wp feels a bit forced w/ the wording
I stay losing battles. I laugh cause i know im the best in
See itd be funny if i ask why no one liked me.. thats a rhetorical question
^aite. concept cool, wording cud'a been a bit better
I have no chill.. i aint with that birdwatching or sit patient
.. When Iam under control im curbstomping this kids face in
^iam under control? why is he under control if u're curbstomping him? are u called control? are ur shoes called control? idk. this doesn't rly work for me.
I dont wanna hear that 'i really be out here' all loud like u got the method
Bitch the Only thing u turn up is the TV to drown the sound of your own depression
^lol. that punchline was unexpected. which is rly nice w/ punchlines. so yea, cool line

standouts were catch a body vs. depression. depression was a pretty fresh spin imo. i think i liked it more. but i also liked spa & roller coaster from rhet. so yea, i think i have him here. more hits. and kinda cleaner wording, if a bit on the basic side. concepts were kinda basic too, so they cud easily be played. but i don't remember seeing these flips unlike paradime. but yo. don't take this as me being overly critical cuz i'm hating on y'all. i'm just tryna show u what ppl think when they look at ur bars. and i ask the questions u can rly ask urself to find weak spots in ur verses. so yea. if i'm being harsh, it's to show u were the room for improvement is. overall, this was a close battle with some rly nice ideas tho. so props to both. i got rhet on more hits/consistency.
v/iamrhet