what i was referring to was the rhyme placement, theres a lot of similar sounding words within the lines (particularly that couplet) and rapped in quick succession - those two lines would sound dope:
sluggin with the dozens but im dumpin with the somthings
wars won below amount to nothin for the munchkins
i just think if said aloud that shit reads more audio-friendly (i hate saying audio) than it comes off in text
its more suited to songs
Last edited by Clutbuck; 06-20-2015 at 05:59 AM.
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